The Official Writing Challenge
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Beautifully written and nicely done! I loved this sweet and touching story. Good message. Thank you. Keep writing in His name.
God Bless~
This is a really sweet story. I liked your message. Things like FB can just become routine or a contest to see who his the most friends.

Some red ink, peaked should be piqued. Also try to do more showing than telling. You may have accomplished this by showing Katie's reaction's while she read her friend's story. His words could have been in italics and told from the first person.

You did a great job on making thestory about the topic. It left me with a nice warm feeling.
This certainly was a moving story, with a great ending too.
This was a great story that held my attention all the way through.
This is a very simply written story with a great message. If we really took the time to know all of our 'virtual friends' I think we'd be rather astonished by their stories.

My only 'red ink' is the reference to being 'left in a wheelchair;' your next paragraph says he was able to walk, which was a little confusing (merely a case of tweaking some words). I really liked this, well done.
Nice job! Congratulations on your HR standing. God Bless~