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This is a great story. It all felt realistic. I felt like I was right there. Great storytelling.
A lovely Amish story quite authentic. I did pick up on one grammar error in the last sentence.

"From that point on, no more trouble occurred and Martin was very careful of whom he hung around with."
'With' is a preposition and should not be used to end a sentence. It could read:
From that point on, no more trouble occurred. Martin was very careful with whom he hung around.
I am no expert and still learning myself but be encouraged this story was very good.
Loved the story, keep writing.
I loved your story. It moved quickly and I liked Martin and his dad. I liked that it didn't end with a resolution to Martin's big question, but the end did feel a little rushed.