The Official Writing Challenge
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08/29/09
My goodness, I’m dizzy with the sheer volume of events cascading throughout your story. What a prolific output! Given the emotional impact conveyed, you barely allowed me to remember to catch my breath. With a bit more trimming of the hedges . . . well, you know . . . less is more idea . . . still, with such talent, I’ll be looking for your next entry. Bryan. 28Aug09Fri.
08/29/09
What a roller coaster ride! You describe so well the painful emotions and despair that come with severe disappointment. Your story illustrates how we grow with acceptance and that sometimes, acceptance brings with it the very thing that it seemed God had been with-holding. The writing needs a little editing. Maybe you could submit it to "Critique Circle" on FaithWriters. I'm looking forward to reading more of your writing! You have a gift for descriptive writing.