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09/18/08
What a heartbreaking situation, and what incredible truth you wove into this. I hope this isn't true. Thank you for sharing.
Thank you for sharing this story. You have presented some important truths here. One way to make it stronger would be to add some dialogue. A conversation between Selena and Rowena, for example. Thanks again for sharing, and God Bless!
How touching! I agree, a little more dialogue would be nice. Great job!
09/24/08
This was good. I could really feel her pain.

Adding an extra line between paragraphs makes it easier on the eyes.

I'm so glad she found someone she could trust in the end. Great job.