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TITLE: Look At Me Daddy | Previous Challenge Entry
By Michelle Roufley
04/17/08 -
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Airborne on thundering hooves,
Her heart surging wildly
Refusing to calm down.
"Look at me Daddy."
The virtuoso of the show,
A bloomed peony in tights and tutu.
An enduring ovation just for her.
Her swollen chest erupting with happiness.
"Look at me Daddy."
Primped and pampered, taking delight in detail.
Making her beauty glisten.
The Monarch of the Prom.
Enchanting in her royalty.
"Look at me Daddy."
Bedecked in white, to embark on a new life.
Golden curls on the verge of her veiled face.
Floating on his arm down the aisle.
He kisses her adieu on a rouged cheek.
"Look at me Daddy."
A precious babe in her arms.
Love in her eyes.
Cherishing the moments,
Reveling in happiness.
"Look at me Daddy"
A dream in a young girl’s head.
A Cinderella never coming up from the ashes.
Broken courage, lost hope.
He was only a voice on the end of the phone,
never seeing, she’d never say
"Look at me Daddy"
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I am not sure why you are Beginners because this is not the work of an amateur. Truly excellent - you have the mechanics of poetry, the flow and rhythm down, and then you were able to create a word picture that blew me away.
Well done.
I agree with Jan. Not only masterful, but haunting, with outstanding imagery. Two of my favorites are:
"A bloomed peony in tights and tutu."
and
"The monarch of the prom."
I like the double meaning of "monarch," both of the beautiful butterfly and royalty.