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It will help readers if you put an extra space between paragraphs. Nice glimpse into MC's feelings. :)
Yes...forgotten cookies are certainly 'spilled milk'. Right on topic! An extra space between paragraphs helps the reader.
Keep writing.
Really cute. That made me laugh out loud. Sometimes, I can relate to that! :)
This would be a great devotional, I would space it out as it was a difficult read.
Man, you really, REALLY dug into one of my poems and left a five-start critique, Liz! I think it only right that I come here and attempt the same for you. However, your article is so sweet and to-the-point that it's hard to highlight something thatisn't already prominently displayed. You are very organized in your craft. I think I'll copy a little and highlight the human nature you display with the patient. The winding of the hair around one's finger is quite a halmark of an overly-nervous personality-type. Spot-on! I enjoyed this.