The Official Writing Challenge
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02/14/08
This is a very nice poem and right on topic! Thank you for sharing!
Laury
I think you have an excellent grasp of scriptural references to this topic. Keep it up, you will be highly regarded one day.
02/18/08
A poem! O what wonderful thoughts! Next time, try to make a rhyming pattern, maybe every other line could rhyme. It's good. I loved it.
Great truths, and great job meeting the challenge.

I would encourage you to use more imagery, which speaks to the heart in a way that raw words alone cannot.

Keep up the good work!

Ben
I personally have a difficult time writing poetry, so I really admire people that can craft a good poem. I think this is a very good poem.

I too would have liked to see more of a rhyming pattern, but the thoughts being conveyed are on topic and very meaningful. Thank you for sharing!
Very nice poem. It flowed better for me to read it as four line stanzas, i.e.

I see your heart in a contrite state,
I treasure that much more,
Than any good deed you lay down,
Before my Holy Throne.

Nice writing. :)

Marlene