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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "A Man is Known by the Company He Keeps" (without using the actual phrase). (01/31/08)
"I'm so ready to start on this journey. Do you have an idea how long it's been now?"
"Well, I just want you to be careful. Not that I don't trust you, but you never can be too careful"
"I understand and I appreciate your concern. Just keep me in your prayers, will you?" Ken said as he gave his mom a quick kiss on the cheek. "I'll call you" he said as he walked towards the checkpoint to catch his plane.

Samantha stood there a little longer, watching her son with mixed emotions...glad to see the dramatic and wonderful changes in his life, but at the same time apprehensive and unsure of what lies ahead of him.

She muttered a prayer as he disappeared in the crowd, and she turned to return home.

She was a single mother and Ken was all she had. Together they had experienced so many challenges in life, the climax of which was when Ken had gotten into the wrong group in high school. At first she had noticed a withdrawal in him, and then he had become secretive keeping so much to himself and sharing absolute nothing concerning him with her, as he used to.

Gradually, he had drifted further and further away, sometimes sneaking out of the house at odd hours after she had gone to bed. The greatest shock of all was the day she got that phone call from Ken's school, asking her to come over right away.

She arrived at the school only to learn Ken had been caught with a group of boys using drugs, right on the school grounds!

“Where did I go wrong” she thought as the tears were streaming down her face.

Her church had been a real help in those times. Ken had joined rehabilitation, in addition to becoming active in the youth group. It was a real struggle though, and eventually, they had later relocated, all in the hope of breaking his ties with his old friends.

But now, he was all grown and had taken a job in the same city of his birth. He had stayed clean all these years, but she couldn’t help but emphasize to him the importance of keeping good quality friends…after all, they both know first hand, that evil communication corrupts good manners...
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Laury Hubrich 
02/08/08
This is a good story. I did notice you changed tenses a couple of times from past to present. You need to watch out for that. It would help if you got someone to proofread your entry. It's so hard to for us to see our own mistakes. Just a thought:) Keep on writing!
Laury
Hanne Moon 
02/10/08
Good example of the topic. You should have broken the first paragraph up. It confused me because I couldn't tell who was speaking. One spot where you switched from past to present tense and then back. This was well done, and I encourage you to keep writing!
Julie Arduini
02/12/08
Oh you left me wanting more! This was well done and I know the word limit is something to keep in mind. If word limit isn't an issue, expand a bit to show readers more depth to the relationship. I'd love to see a glimpse of their journey together shown more than told. Again, I bet word count gets in the way but you had my interest big time!
Marlene Austin
02/12/08
Good sensitivity to the emotions and questions parents ask when going through situations like this. :)