The Official Writing Challenge
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I think you have a good theme, but hard to follow at times.
You have a good message with great potential to involve your readers. With a bit more combing this one can shine.
11/03/07
This definitely points out the importance of being sensitive to the Lord's leading.

It might help to put your character's thoughts in italics. There's information on how to do that in the FAQ section of the FaithWriters message boards.
I agree with the above commets and I also agree with the message you brought forth. So many times we put God off when He should be our #1. Great writing, a little tweaking and this would blow the socks off someone facing the same delima! God Bless
11/10/07
Hi Kathy. That was a beautiful essay. You did good! It's difficult to add responsibilities to our lives but when the Lord calls... Love, Donna