The Official Writing Challenge
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09/23/07
Thank you for presenting this study on peace.

A few suggestions: Take a look at your first sentence, and make it into a few shorter ones. And in the section after the scripture from Matthew, sometimes you're in 1st person and sometimes you're in 2nd person. It's best to stick with 1st person, in my opinion.

Thanks for sharing your heart with your readers.