The Official Writing Challenge
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02/10/07
Jim had a great line: "My boss asked me to meet you." What a way to "hook" you!

If you re-visit this, consider writing it more as a short story, with separated dialog, descriptive action, etc. That might involve your readers a bit more than a narrative such as this.

It's wonderful, the way the Lord will bring a certain person to mind.

Good POV.