The Official Writing Challenge
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02/03/07
I liked the message of this story. Try to stay away from the passive voice, especially at the very beginning. Active sentences will draw readers in more effectively. I also liked the comparison of of man and the wheat and reading the Bible.
Good point!
02/04/07
A very good lesson here and one clearly conveyed. I enjoyed this story and was impressed by the lesson told in a parable form. Good job
02/06/07
A modern parable with a very good lesson
02/06/07
Really liked this parable - you had me hooked from the beginning, wondering what the lesson was. I thought your explanation at the end was a bit confusing and could use work, but I really liked it overall. One picky detail: it should be "there was a man WHO," instead of "there was a man THAT." :)
02/08/07
What a wonderful message...thanks! Keep on writing and I'll be reading.