The Official Writing Challenge
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08/18/06
I like this but would space it out a bit, to make it more reader friendly. Great job
08/18/06
This started out real good, but petered out in the end, keep up the good work though.
I like this line the best:

"It’s hard to keep going not knowing what he knows"


I also think oyu accidently left the 's off of Lord's face.

No big deal.

Good submission.

May God bless.
Sincerely,
Dan Blankenship

08/18/06
You've got some great phrases in here. Work on making your meter more consistent to really bump up the quality of your poetry a notch. Good job!
08/19/06
Hey, this poem reminds me of my working at writing for Faithwriters. I work and work to get up to the next level. Sometimes I wonder what I'm doing here, too! I know one thing: I'm really not qualified to be a judge of poetry. I could more teach mice how to avoid setting off a trap than I could show you how to write good poetry. I certainly respect your talent, however! God Bless!
Good message.