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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Black (10/15/09)

TITLE: Michaela's Black, Black Hair
By Verna Cole Mitchell
10/20/09


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Michaela’s hair was solid black,
As black as ebony,
Just like the night in starless skies,
A sable symphony

“Her hair was black when she was born,”
Michaela’s mother said,
“With wisps of raven-colored threads
Atop her tiny head.”

Michaela, as a little girl,
Had pigtails black as dye,
And when the lads would tug on them,
She’d give them a black eye.

While in her teens, her inky locks
Went streaming out behind her.
“They look just like your horse’s tail,”
Her daddy would remind her.

And when a woman she became,
In high heels and long dresses,
A red-haired Viking fell for her
And for her raven tresses.

Their home was blessed by family,
Three darling baby girls.
They all looked like their mama with
Their glossy coal-black curls.

Then one day, when her girls grew up,
Michaela felt dismay;
She saw some silver ‘mid the black,
And feared that she’d go gray.

Too soon her hair was frosted like
A deep dark choc’lit cake.
Michaela stopped at Beauty Shop;
She’d had all she could take.

Michaela’s hair is black once more,
As black as ebony,
Just like the night in starless skies,
A sable symphony.


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Margaret Kearley 10/22/09
I love this poem. Ouch .... though, is a big close to home! Fantastic rhymes
Charla Diehl 10/22/09
This cute poem has even flow and easy rhyme. Great job.
Loren T. Lowery10/22/09
Aside that this should be framed and hung up in a beauty shop somewhere, my favorite stanza:
"Michaela, as a little girl,
Had pigtails black as dye,
And when the lads would tug on them,
She’d give them a black eye."
Now that's the kind of girl that would have stolen my heart when I was about 6 or 7 or 8 : )
Beth LaBuff 10/25/09
I loved the progression of this clever poem, from the pigtails, to the Viking, the three daughters, to the hair dye. I enjoyed this!!
Mona Purvis10/27/09
Just too cute! What's a girl to do?

Mona
Betty Castleberry10/27/09
This line made chuckle:

"Michaela, as a little girl,
Had pigtails black as dye,
And when the lads would tug on them,
She’d give them a black eye."

Verna, I enjoy reading all of your poems, but this is one of my favorites. The subtle humor is great. Two thumbs way up.
Linda Watson Owen10/27/09
Words can't express how much I love to read your wonderfully clever rhymes! Each one is such a whimsical delight! I love imagining what Michaela and her handsome Viking must have looked like together. It was fun to see how many synonyms for black you worked into this entertaining little story poem too!
Laury Hubrich 10/28/09
I love how Michaela solved her problem:) I can certainly relate!
Yvonne Blake 10/28/09
Ah,vanity, vanity!
Jan Ackerson 10/28/09
So cute! I'm with the others--that 3rd stanza is a pip!
Carol Slider 10/28/09
I love this delightful poem! Very well done.
Yvonne Blake 10/29/09
Congratulation, dear Verna!
Linda Watson Owen10/29/09
Congratulations, dear friend!! So glad (and not surprised at all!) to see Michaela's ebony tresses gleaming in Editor's Choice! Isn't this fun!!!
Janice Fitzpatrick10/29/09
This is so cute and it just flows. I love your poetry anyways.:0 Congrats on the win.Have a blessed day hon.:0)
Beth LaBuff 10/29/09
I loved seeing this on the EC list, Verna! Congrats on the EC and the HC!
Carol Slider 10/29/09
I'm so happy for you, Verna! Congratulations on a well-deserved EC!!