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Good story. Liked the ending of tying holiness to adoring God.

But I was confused about the following statement. "average since the revival movement spread there has been not more than two per week!
That valley became a much more pleasant place to live."

"has been more than two per week" would have supported the idea of revival. That "not" in there is a negative positioned against "pleasant place to live". I would try rewording that if I was you.

Keep writing.