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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Where Angels Fear to Tread (not about the book) (09/08/11)
I have trusted you so long Lord, but I am having trouble now understanding. People say this is best for me, but I can’t much see that and I want to go home. They say I do things I can’t remember doing and I’m not saying they’re lying but it sure appears it to me Lord!

Not that I’m not grateful for who you send to help me Lord, like that sweet girl that put a blanket over me when I was so cold last night and couldn’t get my words out right.

But then Lord, that skinny ole boy came and put those doggone rails up on my bed and that alarm that sounds off something terrible if I try to get up and I felt like I was in jail again. Can’t you please get me out Lord? Send some angels after me or something! Or are the angels afraid to come in here too, fearing they will get trapped in this place like I am! That could be, they’re smart enough to know a place nobody should get themselves into!

Don’t get me wrong, I appreciate all you do Lord, like sending that girl with the ice cream you knew I was craving and she talked so soft and kind when she fed it to me.

Even so Lord, I want to go home! Why don’t you heal me? They keep telling me I’m sick! Of course I know I’m not that bad, but Lord if they think so, make me look healed so I can get out of here! I tried to pull some stuff off, like that bag attached to my privates, to show them I’m okay, but they just got upset and wouldn’t believe me! Even called my wife in and she told me I had to stop that too! That made me cry! Why did she agree with them?

Actually I cry a lot in here, sometimes because I’m happy, like when they let my family see me! And when that man came and read the bible to me. And I was so happy Lord, when you remembered to have someone shave me!

But I cry more, wondering if even you God, can hear me in this prison. They call it a nursing home, but I know better! It’s a prison alright and I don’t know what I did to get put here, but I want to go home. Home where my family is or even home with you Lord, but please don’t let this prison here be my home much longer!

If you’re teaching me patience Lord, I’ve learned, honest I have! I try not to get upset any more when they have to clean me up because they took too long getting me to the bathroom. I don’t even get upset any more when I am pushed to the side in my wheelchair, waiting for them to do something else, before taking me outside where you know I love to feel that warm breeze across my face. Thank you for teaching me patience Lord, but I understand it now, really I do!

You know God, even if the other angels are afraid of getting trapped in this place with me, I’d think Michael could do it if you’d just send him. I remember those stories and all that battling Michael does for you and I’ll bet even all these tricksters in here couldn’t trap him! This is a terrible prison Lord, it seems like they mostly put old folks in here and you know we just don’t have the strength to fight like we used to. So we really need Michael!

Until you break me out Lord, I want to thank you for the music you send in here to me. That lady with the big ole smile just came in and said they were having some gospel singing down in the big room and she’d take me. You know how much I love music Lord! Especially good ole gospel hymns!

But while I am down there I am going to sneak a peek out that big window and see if there are any angels peeking back in. I understand if they’re afraid to come on in Lord, this place is just too hard to get back out of! But if I see them, it would be a good time then Lord, for you to send Michael along! They could be his backup. And I could go home. Amen.
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
09/17/11
Wow this is outstanding! It broke my heart. You did a great job both bringing attention to some nursing homes as well as forms of dementia. This is definitely an all-time favorite for me!
Virgil Youngblood 
09/17/11
I enjoyed this well written story. It relates well to the challenge topic, I think, and carries a message we all need to hear.
Cheryl von Drehle
09/17/11
Tough topic and many writings this week were good but I couldn't see the topic; this one relates to the topic very well and does a good job presenting cohesive inner dialog
C D Swanson 
09/17/11
Well written and sadly, the laments of most individuals in nursing homes. As I have mentioned before, my entire career I worked as a Director in nursing homes; and the people in there truly lose a lot of their independence, and they need strong advocates (human angels) to be their "voice."

Good job. God Bless~
Noel Mitaxa 
09/19/11
Very sensitive portrayal of your MC, and the milieu he is in. Frustration mixed with hope, and a touch of gratitude amidst the loneliness. Well-captured material.
Edmond Ng
09/22/11
A heartbreaking description of 'imprisonment' expressed so well in written words. Excellent piece.
Lisa Kurasz
09/28/11
This touched my heart deeply.
It reminds me of way to many times of seeing the sadness on the patients in the nursing home. Thank you for giving them a voice in your story.
Carol Penhorwood 
11/07/11
Your story broke my heart! It was as if you were telling my father in law's story. What a relief it will be when we all are released with new bodies to our heavenly home.
Verna Mull
01/23/12
After reading this article, I really feel blessed that you gave my "Wedding Awry-----" such a nice review. This article was outstanding and so many could relate-inside a rest home, and outside-with someone in there! What a great job of writing this was.