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By Tabiatha Tallent
01/24/07
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I often sit and stare out at the open fields of green,
and wonder if the things we see are only just a dream.
The beauty God has shared with us is more than words can say;
I’d like to try and thank Him anyway.

Thank You Lord, for oceans blue and waves that turn to white;
thank You for the fish that swim, their colors soft or bright.
Thank You for the big tall ships, their majesty divine,
and thank You Lord, for making your work shine.

Thank You for the canvas in the sky you paint for me;
the colors are so beautiful, they paint a perfect scene.
And when You add some clouds and let them move and change their shape,
I’m thankful for the humor I see there.

Thank You for the new born babes their skin so soft and pink;
thank You for the beauty of a child while they’re asleep.
Thank You for the time You took, to make us look like You;
You’ve made Your people beautiful, it’s true.

Thank You for the artistry You share with us each day;
the loveliness of each and every thing that You have made.
You’ve adorned the world so we could see the love that’s in Your heart,
I thank You Lord for Your precious works of art.

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Jeanette Oestermyer

01/26/07

A good poem, and I feel that the repetition works well in this particular case. There are a few lines that seem extra long as compared to the others. Of course, there is nothing with that unless it's a formal poem -- like a sonnet or villanelle. God Bless,
Good job,

Marilyn Schnepp

01/28/07

The words and the message of this entry are simply beautiful and magnificent; however, when a poem doesn't flow with that certain rhythmic meter and beat...the beautiful words sometimes get lost in the bumpy ride; perhaps not to all readers, but to those who are a fan of poetry. But I enjoyed the sentiment... Very nice!

Tabiatha Tallent

01/29/07

I think I can do this now that the judges are finished, I should have left a postscript of explanation. This is more of a song, or that's how it was in my head. So, no, the meter is not one of poetry and I guess since no one can hear the melody that's in my head it seems that the meter is off. Sorry guys.

Kathleen Morris

01/30/07

Your poem was a blessing to my day...and poetry doesn't have to follow all the rules when God gives you the words. Just write em down girl!!!

01/31/07

This is gorgeous--I'd love to hear you sing it some day.

01/31/07

Just lovely. Beautiful images - I was "singing" along!

01/31/07

All this needs is a fitting melody. A lovely song from the heart about God's beautiful creation. Thanks for sharing this

Shari Armstrong

01/31/07

Great word pictures - well done :)

Sara Harricharan

01/31/07

What tune did you set this to? I liked it very much and tried to hum it the second time. Nice!

02/07/07

Thank you, Casie, for commenting on my "art" entry because that means I have to come looking for you! Pleased to meet you! and read your enchanting lyrics.

Writing a poem with a melody in mind makes a big difference, I know, because I've tried it, too. I would love to hear this with the melody in full production. I bet it will be splendid!