The Official Writing Challenge
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10/20/09
Oh my! Very touching and sad story. But you know what? I really loved Daisy's rambunctious attitude--I knew when she went missing what had happened to her. Not enough caution and too much spunk--poor Daisy.
10/20/09
Sad story... You did a good job with the dialogue and creating the scenes
10/20/09
Well written,I just can't bear it though!
10/21/09
Oh, such a sad ending. You created very believable characters. Good job and I love your title.
10/21/09
Love your title, love your spunky little girls--really well-done story.

I wish the "stranger" hadn't been such an archetype. Make him jolly and fun, and the ending has a lot more shock and impact.

This is one of my favorites for this week.
You really did a great job with this sad story. It was really believable. I loved Daisy.