The Official Writing Challenge
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01/16/06
Very nice story, but "Reader unfriendly"; by that, I mean it needs to be broken down somewhat into more paragraphs to make it an easier read for the Reader. Otherwise, it was well written with a message for all. Thank you for sharing.
01/19/06
Going home means different places to different people, but wherever it is, God is there. Thanks for the eye opening story!
01/20/06
The material things don't really matter. You've shown that clearly and Ciarra came to realize that she wasted her life on superficials. A very good message you spelt out here. Thanks for sharing.
A very clear message that no amount of material possesions can fill the soul. The paragraphs were a little dense, but otherwise a strongly told piece. God bless.