The Official Writing Challenge
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Very nice reminder to not judge a book by its cover. You had a couple of typos, but it didn't subtract from the beautiful story.
02/11/10
What a wonderful story. I liked the way you used ohhh. Those ohh moments in life. You did a good job of drawing me into your story.
02/17/10
I have a tender spot in my heart for those with disabilities...thank you for this story.

Your dialog seemed unnatural in some places--if you're interested, you might check out "Jan's Writing Basics" in the forums for some tips on writing dialog.

John and Agnes are special parents, indeed!