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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: End (02/13/06)
To the End

Just a few more steps - I am so close but yet so far from my goal. The crowd cheers, “Go! Go! Go! Keep going! Keep going!”

The sweat pours off my face – so close and yet so far from my goal. With my heart pounding - one after the other - my aching feet pound the pavement. Now, with each step a pain shoots up my leg and the sweat continually pouring off my face – panting, panting and more panting.

“I can’t continue like this!”

Only my coach’s words, “Focus! Focus on the goal!” give me courage to continue.

“I can’t do this anymore! I don’t want to do this anymore!”

Again, my coach’s words, “Champions never give up!”

“The others have quit. I want to stop!”

The crowd cheers, “Don’t stop now! Don’t stop now!”

Wiping the sweat from my eyes, I clearly see my goal. Only a few more feet to go, again, my aching feet pound the pavement. Now, the crowd cheers, “Keep going! Keep going!” Only a few more steps to victory, finally, I will reach the end. One step after another, with my twitching muscles, there is no quitting now. With one final step, I break the tape.

Triumphantly, with my hands in the air, I shout, “ I have fought a good fight, I have finished this race and now my prize is waiting.” (II Timothy 4: 7,8 NLT) After running this marathon, my legs finally give out and I crash to the ground. My race was won because I learned to endure to the end.
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Lynda Schultz 
02/21/06
Amen! Well said. Blessings.
Cheryl Harrison
02/24/06
With a little work this could be an outstanding illustration for use in a Bible study. If you would like a few suggestions, please feel free to email me. Keep writing! God Bless.
Patricia Charlton
02/24/06
Thanks Cheryl!

I will e-mail you soon about your suggestions.
Jan Ackerson
02/24/06
I like this a lot--the present tense is effective here, and done well. I think you can leave out the next-to-last sentence about falling to the ground, and perhaps the one after that...you've already made your point (and very well!) with the earlier writing, and the scripture verse. Good job capturing the marathoner's physical and mental state.
Anita Neuman
02/24/06
I love how you've used stilted sentences and repetition to convey the runner's feelings - very effective! I agree with Jan - I think this is stronger if you just end with the scripture. Great job, though. You write wonderful devotions!!!
Patricia Charlton
02/24/06
Thanks for your comments Jan And Anita. I get your point about the last to sentences. I love writing devotionals. My question to you both is this. Is this article reflect the topic (End)?
Jan Ackerson
02/24/06
In my opinion, it's on topic.
Patricia Charlton
02/24/06
Hi Anita
What is a stilted sentence?
Sandra Petersen
02/24/06
I don't run but I have been a sideline spectator at Grandma's Marathon in northeastern Minnesota. You helped me understand the agony and bone-weariness I have seen etched on runners' faces as they straggle in, each of them determined to finish the race. This was very good!
Now I'm exhausted!
Patricia Charlton
02/24/06
Thanks for your comment Sandra. You think running this race is tiring, try writing about this race. I got very tired.
Marilyn Schnepp 
02/25/06
Super job! Great inspiring piece and a masterpiece of an ending! Only one goof.."gave" instead of "give". I loved it from beginning to triumphant End! Keep up the good work! Kudos!