The Official Writing Challenge
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I think steps and stairs are a perfect example of repeating. You made me smile with your descriptions. I thought it was quite the clever take on the topic.

This may just be me, because sometimes I'm slow on the uptake, but I didn't quite get what was happening in the college scene. I know somehow she tricked the stranger to let her in, but I wasn't quite sure how or why.

You did a nice job of bringing your MC to life. I think your ending is great and it is something to make the reader think, which is always a good thing.
02/03/13
This was a great piece I really enjoyed it. It held my attention, made me smile and it was a clever take on the topic. I especially loved the last line. Great job. God bless~
Congratulations on ranking 7th in level one!