The Official Writing Challenge
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10/08/15
Excellent story. The transition from the present day to the Bible story might have been a bit smoother, but your details and your descriptions were very good
10/09/15
I like how you ended the story by showing how important it is to want to know Jesus.

Critique: You might want to add more dialogue and put each quote on a separate line.

All the best. :)
10/09/15
Touching and lovely story. Well done!

God bless~
A delightful story by one who knows a little about wind and water.

You easily related it to an appropriate Bible story.
10/15/15
Congrats on your 3rd Place ranking!