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This is a lovely message. I always enjoy devotions that start out with a true-life story. You did a great job of transitioning into the Bible from your story.

You do have quite a few errors like writing you instead of your. When someone different speaks, you should start a new paragraph and double spacing between them will give the reader that white space that makes it easier to read. A good proofreader can help you catch these or if you wait a day or two, then read your story aloud, you may pick up on some of the typos.

I could feel the pain of the MC. Adults often seem to forget what it was like to be a kid. Your testimony teaches not only to be patient and loving parents but to shout Thank you to Christ who is so patient with our many flaws.
02/02/13
Great job with this authentic story that holds significance and brings forward an important and crucial message to all who read it.

Nicely done. Thank you.
God bless~