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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Ohhh…. (02/04/10)

TITLE: The Audacity of Hope
By Kristi Peifer
02/11/10


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Tamah hung back from the teeming throng, consumed by her thoughts.

Should I do this? How could I possibly approach him? I can’t even get close to the townspeople without causing a scene!

Twelve years of infirmity and isolation had left her weary—weary of the scorn of being unclean. The moment her feet touched the dusty ground of Capernaum in broad daylight, tumult broke out. Mothers scurried to keep their children from crossing her path for fear that they might touch her and suffer the same fate. “Unclean! Unclean!” they would cry out. Tamah had learned the hard way that it was better to stay in the shadows than to suffer public humiliation.

I’ve come too far to turn back now. I’ve heard the stories about him. He can do things even the doctors cannot do. I’ve seen enough of them to know!

She covered her face with her shawl, mustering every last vestige of hope she had left.

If there’s even a chance he might take pity on me, I must try.

Tamah made her way to the back of the crowd, her footsteps light and unnoticed. The mass of moving bodies engulfed her almost immediately, each soul present angling for a glimpse of the renowned teacher.

How fortunate! No one is paying me any mind.

She edged closer to where the teacher, this Jesus, was listening to a man’s impassioned pleas for his dying daughter.

I know that man—he’s a leader in the synagogue. Jairus, I think it was. He’s a man of significance. Surely the teacher will be preoccupied with helping him.

Tamah considered turning back.

No. I must not! If I can just get close enough to touch him—perhaps that would be enough!

Sensing a fleeting moment of opportunity, Tamah crept through the multitude until she could just barely see the back of Jesus’ cloak. She wedged her arm in between two sweat-drenched observers, groping in desperation for even a meager brush with his robe.

Please, please!

As her fingers grazed the fringe of his covering, she blanched.

Ohhhhh…

She felt her strength returning as her hemorrhaging abruptly came to an end.

“Who touched me?”

Tamah’s eyes widened in fear. He knows!

No one admitted to the infraction. Even one of Jesus’ own men pointed out the sheer number and proximity of the gathered masses.

Yet he persisted in questioning. “No, someone deliberately touched me, for I felt healing power go out from me.”

It was then Tamah knew she could no longer hide. “It was me,” she said, her voice trembling in time with her knees.

Those nearby her cleared a path, allowing Tamah to openly gaze upon Jesus for the first time. The enormity of what she had just done washed over her, overwhelming her with conflicting emotions.

I must thank him, this man who does miracles! No, I cannot speak to him! I am unclean…but then, I am no longer ailing. What mere man can do these things? Is it…could it possibly be?

Overcome, she fell at Jesus’ feet.

I am not worthy!

Gathering what little courage she had left, Tamah recounted her miraculous healing for all to hear. When she was finished, she hung her head, shamed by her own audacity.

Ever so gently, Jesus touched Tamah’s face, lifting her chin until her eyes met his. Never before had she seen such compassion in someone’s expression.

“Daughter,” he said, “your faith has made you well. Go in peace.”




*Based on Luke 8:40-48 (NLT).


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Verna Mull02/12/10
My, how you made this story come alive. i'm always thrilled with this account, but this is the icing on the cake. Thank-you
Sarah Elisabeth 02/16/10
wonderfully done! wow, you really brought this story to life. perfectly titled ;-)
Jan Ackerson 02/16/10
Very well-written--you really captured her desperation.

I'd consider a new title, as this is the title of a current nonfiction book.

You shone a wonderful light on this Biblical character--well done.
Margaret Kearley 02/17/10
Beautiful. Wonderful descriptive writing.
Rachel Rudd02/17/10
Very interesting take on a very familiar verse. :) I actually thought it was a story of a leper at first. Your descriptions are excellent. I also liked the way you left out telling exactly what she said about her healing. You told the story from a fresh perspective. Well done!
Philippa Geaney 02/18/10
Well written. Well discerned.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/18/10
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed your story. You made a familiar Bible Story seem new.
Tessy Fuller02/18/10
Congrats on your win! It didn't take long to get to read one of your articles, when you take the #1 spot. I really enjoyed reading this. You made the story come alive.
Catrina Bradley 02/18/10
One of my favorite Bible stories brought to life! Well done, and congats on your win!
Amanda Brogan02/18/10
Wow! Beautifully written! I love reading (and writing) stories from the Bible that are told in such a way that you allow your imagination to envision details that are not included in Scripture. LOVE the ending! You nailed that first place prize! ;)
Sarah Elisabeth 02/18/10
Congrats on your first place Kristi! Again, a great piece
Gregory Kane02/18/10
An apt retelling. Well done.
Margaret Kearley 02/18/10
Congratulations! A very well deserved win for this wonderful retelling of this most wonderful story.
Ann Grover02/18/10
Beautiful and well-written. A well-deserved win!
Donna Wolther02/19/10
Beautiful in all ways. Thank you.
Lisha Hunnicutt02/21/10
Congratulations on a 1st place finish! Very well written.
Sherry Curtsinger04/15/10
This is an amazing piece. Beautifully told and beautifully written.