The Official Writing Challenge
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You have a great salvation message here that will touch the heart of readers and I can see the Holy Spirit using it in many ways. I can feel your passion in your words, Back when the message boards were more active, one of the writing tips was to never begin with a definition of the topic word. I admit this did turn me off slightly, but you did include some things I didn't think of, so that's good. I was confused about the sudden transition to Adam and Eve. You do a great job of explaining it farther down. If you moved that to the beginning, the transition would be smoother. I liked the Bible verses you used. You were on topic and you give the reader plenty to think about.
04/12/25
You have packed in a lot of information here, but without any para breaks to engage with us or give us more time to absorb it. This unfortunately reduces the impact of your message, as it warns without inviting.
04/16/25
I didn't know some of the tanning stuff you wrote about. That was very interesting. It's a study and as such you did very well. Good work.
04/17/25
Doug,
This was so informative, and interesting. A bang-up job with the topic! Nicely done.
I enjoyed it so much.
God Bless~