The Official Writing Challenge
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04/15/22
A good spread of biblical truths, which would be easier to read if you use footnotes instead of listing each reference in the body of the text.
This would make a great Bible study guide. I could see small groups looking up the references and possibly you could take it a step farther and add thought-provoking questions that participants could answer. You do repeat quite a few words such as inheritance, heir, debt, and born-again. By using a thesaurus or tightening some of the sentences, this could be fixed easily. For example this line:
All born-again believers are forever saved, but not all born-again believers will receive all of the rewards and privileges that he or she could have.
could be tweaked like this:
All born-again believers are saved, but they all might not be able to receive every possible reward or privilege.
It's just a tiny difference that avoids repeating words yet still stays true to your message and voice. You've done a fine job of writing on topic, packed a lot of information in the limited word count, and delivered a clear Christian message.
04/22/22
Congratulations on your EC.
04/22/22
Congratulations on your EC.