The Official Writing Challenge
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06/03/17
Retirement is not an easy choice for many people. I've known several individuals who took a part-time job after retiring because of boredom and others who got busier after they retired.
This is a sweet exchange between friends. I think you demonstrated the topic perfectly. I enjoyed your subtle sense of humor.
06/08/17
I love the dialogue. Sounds like a great friendship.
This obviously showed the nervousness of the MC instead of telling it. I liked how you used the donut, to add the nervous actions to the words. I noticed one small typo when you said, "I've worked her a long time."
06/08/17
Congratulations on your 4th place finish this week, Tiffanie. This tender story warmed my heart. I think I need some ice cream.
Congratulations, my friend. Happy Dance!