The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a cute story. It's not easy to write in the present tense, but you did a nice job (the only thing I noted was in the opener, you said were playing instead of plays or are pkaying, but that is being super nitpicky on my part). Although I predicted the ending (I thought it would be a stuffed one not wooden), I still really enjoyed it and was eager to read on to see if I was right. You did a great job of sprinkling delightful bits of humor and great mental images. You nailed the topic too. Great job.
05/26/16
I like the way you wove the story throughout the devotional. I'm not really a snake fan myself, so I'm glad its wood was harder than its bite.
05/26/16
Great job with the topic!

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