The Official Writing Challenge
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06/05/14
A very sobering read. The ending was uplifting as he'd realized the need to stop, and followed Christ.

Well written.

God bless~
06/10/14
*chilling*
I think it would have been a stronger story if you ended with him walking away. Maybe you could have inserted a scene of the last incident to give the reason why he left.
All in all, it's a sad part of our culture that needs to be told.
Wow! What a powerful story. My heart aches as I read and I wonder how many people have such horrific dark secrets. Thankfully, Jesus offers a gift to all who are willing to claim it. I also thought it quite brilliant about how the granddaughter thought she discovered the truth. This story will mean many things depending on the reader's heart and history. It takes great still to write such a story. Congratulations on ranking 14 overall.