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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Hot and Cold (04/09/09)
This morning brought a mid Spring snow
Which confuses and confounds;
Bright blossoms bent and broken low,
Chill wind is trespassed out of bounds.

A day ago the sun blazed warm
To coax the burgeoned buds out wide;
The frog song hum and bee buzz swarm
Swept up to welcome temperate tide.

Bright sizzling color fades too soon to white,
A forgotten Summery promise
As Winter reasserts its right
To cloak and coat in ice.

A sunbath teased me then to blush
And grateful, shed each layer.
Now cool breeze forces bitter rush
To wrap in warm comforter of heart felt prayer.

My breath fog blurs each step I take
And stumbling forth to Fall
So now I ache for Spring and must forsake
Predictability at all.

Each prayer I say could be my last
My heart grows slowly silent;
Life’s boundaries blur when time has passed
From death to now transcendent.
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Lynda Schultz 
04/16/09
Deep. Very nicely done.
Verna Cole Mitchell 
04/17/09
I enjoyed your mid-spring snow along with you, a very creative take on hot and cold
Jan Ackerson
04/19/09
WONDERFUL alliteration, with all of those gorgeous "B" sounds! My favorite poem this week, by far!
Kristen Hester
04/19/09
Good job! This flows so nicely!
Carol Slider 
04/19/09
Winter in Texas was exactly like that this year! I loved your use of words, especially in the absolutely gorgeous last stanza. Well done.
Catrina Bradley
04/20/09
You painted an accurate portrait of the unpredictability of nature, segue nicely into the comparison to the unpredictability of life.

The first two stanzas have a wonderful rhythm that begged me to read them out loud. I sense a transition in the stanzas that follow..not only in the meter but in the mood. I'm not enough of a poetry connoisseur to appreciate the technicalities, but I did feel the heart of your words. I was drawn to read to the end.