The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked that you used cabin in a different way than many did. It was a refreshing POV. Work making your trnsitions a bit smoother. It felt sudden that you were traveling during Covid but suddenly jumped back twenty years or more. When telling a true story, every detail is in our minds, but the reader may not need every detail, so ask yourself if it moves the story forward before including. It's a hard line to find sometimes for sure. You did a nice job of writing on topic. I think you had a great message at the end and could feel your passion in your words.
09/21/22
Nicely done, wow!
God Bless~