The Official Writing Challenge
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03/10/22
The ending was a surprise--that your journey took you to a place where you were both saved! The Lord truly does work in mysterious ways! Thank you for sharing!
03/11/22
A nice surprise ending. Just two minor things: in the first paragraph you have a comma after “my husband and I” which doesn’t belong and elsewhere you say “inpatient” when I think you meant “impatient.” Other than that I enjoyed this twist of a trip to the redemption center. Good job.
Very interesting. It could be said to ask the imagination to stretch as it seems to have layers that to the skim read, could easily be missed.
Great work.
03/15/22
Interesting dialogue, with a surprise bonus at the end.
Well done.
This is a sweet story. I liked the ending although I have to admit I did see it coming, but it was still a great message.