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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: POUND (07/15/21)
She passed around the deep-sided tan tray containing an eight-inch-long blob the size and shape of a maple bar donut. Except, in this case, it was not edible. Golden brown — like that of burned butter, the glob had the texture of bumpy, over-solidified gelatin Jigglers. What was it? A plastic model of a pound of human fat.

Gross to look at and disgusting to touch, we shuddered in repulsion that such abhorrent adipose tissue had reproduced inside our overweight bodies. As an accountability group of men and women meeting each week to lose weight, this visual presentation was an effective tool in seeing the reality of a single pound of fat.

We often tell ourselves that we only lost — or only gained one pound. But that rubbery model demonstrated how sizable “just” a pound is. It adds up. Gaining just a single pound leads to another pound. And another. Soon, it’s five or more pounds of fat padding our bodies. In terms of food, one pound is equivalent to four sticks of butter. Or two cups of shortening.

Yuck, we say, because we don’t see the actual fat inside of us. But I do see the consequences of said human lard -- and I am not happy about it. Therefore, I’m working harder to rid myself of excess blubber. It’s not easy, but I’ve been successful in losing a substantial amount thus far. And now, I have only 15 blobs of the loathsome body invaders remaining to zap into nothingness. One pound at a time.
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Sue Botte 
07/25/21
Good descriptive work of the unwelcomed adipose accumulating in our bodies. I am inspired to get rid of my extra two pounds. Well written and thank you.
Marlene Custer 
07/28/21
A very descriptive piece of writing. It certainly inspires one to shed unnecessary pounds.
Art Fahy 
08/01/21
Good start. Good descriptions throughout the piece. I like the ? In the first paragraph What was It? It peaked my interest.

I like the way you worked the topic in, single pound of fat, one pound = 4 sticks of butter, 2 cups of shortening . Lots of visuals.

Good closing. And now, I…nothingness. One pound at a time. It shows your drive.

Very well written and communicated. It flowed smoothly and kept my interest throughout. Thank you