The Official Writing Challenge
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10/12/17
I can only imagine that you're describing a tornado - which thankfully I've never experienced - but this is so graphic and compact in its description that it should rate well.
10/13/17
Great job with all the details and descriptions. I could feel the fear of the mc and the relief when it was all over.
10/16/17
I felt the fear the MC had. I wasn't sure what kind of danger the MC was in, but I thought that added to the suspense.
This could be the memory of a child or a month ago for an adult.

It sounded like a true life story written from memory.
Congratulations on ranking 17 overall. Happy Dance.