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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)
sometimes the gray seeps in
collecting in the bottom

a muddy ooze clinging

a sluggish sludge
weighing down all forwards

weighing down all ‘want to’s

sometimes the gray
rides like a heavy horseman

weighing down shoulders
forcing hands into thick sands of
can’t

sometimes the gray
sucks breath from willing lips
leaving no words
and no sign
but a sigh

uninvited, the gray creeps in
covering all

hovering thoughts into vapor
drifting into shadows
silent as dusk.

at times the gray stays
settling in

slowly
stealing away sweet gleem
smothering every shimmer
with dull dust

the gray rolls
a sleeping hulk
killing softly infant spirit underneath

sometimes the gray
persuades
insists
that color isn’t

gray grows
imposes
holding back light’s entrance
refusing to exit

sometimes the gray
drapes the shuddering soul
and blocks all view with velvet folds

who can resist
the gray that persists
and eats away glad being

what light can sweep the deep
and lift to sun life
the soul that weeps

sometimes the gray

the gray
can be brushed away



“Praise be to the God and Father of our Lord Jesus Christ,
The Father of all compassion and the God of all comfort,...”
II Corinthians 1:3 NIV
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Date
Verna Cole Mitchell 
08/02/07
This masterful poem describes depression perfectly.
Joanne Sher 
08/03/07
Amazing, amazing imagery. Love the glimmer of hope at the end - an excellent portrayal of depression.
Dee Yoder
08/04/07
"...and blocks all view with velvet folds" is one of my favorite lines. Depression felt like this to me, once. It's hard to escape that draping velvet, too! It feels soft, but it smothers life. Great images.
Jan Ackerson
08/06/07
slowly
stealing away sweet gleem
smothering every shimmer
with dull dust

Only 11 words, yet they so perfectly use alliteration, imagery, personification...what a master poet you are! And how perfectly you captured depression, and ended with a perfect little whisper. Wonderful.
Laurie Glass 
08/06/07
On topic and I appreciate the ending - just a bit of hope. Well done on describing sad in this poem.
Karri Compton
08/06/07
I liked this a lot. You painted some good pictures with your words. And hope at the end!
Mariane Holbrook
08/10/07
You are so good! This is such a masterpiece in every way. It makes the rest of us wannabees weep with envy!

No kidding! You're a master word carpenter at work!