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Would love to have my senses involved in this retelling - sight, sound, smell, etc would have set a more compelling read of a familiar story.
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This is a succinct retelling of The Prodigal Son. Don't be afraid to add dialog, body language and thoughts to bring your words to life. Instead of using exclamation points, allow your words to do your exclaiming. You did a nice job of writing on topic.

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This story has so much potential for expansion on internal feelings of all involved. As a writer you get to describe those feelings, and this seemed a little reserved. Good message and great story!