The Official Writing Challenge
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11/30/23
Wow! What a beautiful expression of God's love for us! Horse the end of the article I was in tears. And I can relate to those losses as well, as I have recently lost my husband of 38 years.
I love how the story was so well put together. The last sentence, especially bound the whole story together!
Well done!
11/30/23
In reference to my comment: "Horse" was supposed to be "Towards". :)
Good story. It flows from one thought to the next. Very good ending.
The main problem I had with it was the number of times you used "he", "she"', or a name to start a sentence. Count them and you will see what I mean. There's nothing wrong with doing that, but it helps to vary the sentence structure.
Keep writing.