The Official Writing Challenge
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01/12/23
This devotional could actually end earlier. I'd consider leaving off the last two paragraphs. You already made an important point. Good job.
You have all the necessary parts to make this relatable and relevant. Perhaps the addition of a personal example from your life?
Thanks for sharing. Blessings
You've a lot of passion in this piece. You do mention both topic words but it doesn't feel like either is the central theme, if I removed those lines, it wouldn't really change the message of your story. You picked some great verses,
Good job.