The Official Writing Challenge
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08/12/21
This entry was very well written and kept my attention from beginning to end. It holds substantial truths that need to be addressed by us all. The paragraph that begins "There is a right way..." needs checking. Other than that, I found your entry well wroth the read. God bless!
08/15/21
I really liked this piece. It is very well constructed and makes some great points. I liked how it began and ended in mentioning confusion.

If you're not already, I suggest reading your piece aloud several times. It may help you hear where you're missing a word or used a wrong word. In fact reading this review aloud before submitting helped me catch some of my own errors.

Three I found in this piece:
“Experiencing less confusion is one of the earthly rewards of having been obedient to 2 Peter 3:18. “ Obedient to what?

“is worth a pound a cure. “ I think you meant “a pound of cure.”

“Preachers point that no one ever has, is not now, or ever will be good enough or do enough good deeds to open Heaven's gates (Roman 3: 23, 24)” Since all three phrases are meant to connect to”good enough” I suggest changing “ever has” to “ever has been”.

I loved the analogy of the brakes. It's so perfect and memorable and a way of helping your message stick in the mind of the reader. Great job. Keep edifying the flock.