The Official Writing Challenge
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06/11/21
Rather than stringing a lot of related scripture together to make a point, here are my suggestions:
1. Strengthen the hook. Show a specific incident where this happened to you and all the emotions you felt at the time. Emotion will draw the reader in.
2. Take that physical experience and relate another one that impacted you spiritually. It is unnecessary to refer to the challenge word over and over again. It can be insulting to the reader. Make the reader work by finding the challenge theme, even without using the challenge word.
3. write a powerful conclusion, again referring to the emotions experienced by not seeing another car in your "blind" spot.
Hope that helps and keep writing!