The Official Writing Challenge
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Congratulations on ranking 6th in your level. The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.
This is an interesting take on the topic. Bedbugs can certainly inflict damage without ever being seen. I'm not quite sure how best to give constructive feedback. It was a slow read for me, almost too analytical and dry. Your message is great and one that we need. I guess my best advice would be to add some action and suspense. It's hard to do with nonfiction, but consider creative nonfiction so you can add dialog and body language. You have some great talent for sure. Keep writing. Even more, I'd love to challenge you this week to read and comment on every entry in your level and some on the next. By reading with a kind, but critical eye, not only will you help others, but you will be surprised at how much you learn about your own writing as well.