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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Red (10/01/09)
Back in the 1970’s I was involved in a program in our church that made us
responsible for a shut-in who was a member of our church. I chose Florence, not because I knew her, but she had had a son burned at the stake by his classmates. He recovered from his injuries but never came back to his
hometown.

I never knew of any other children, she was a widow and I felt called to offer her my friendship. My first visit was a shocker. That she had a small white dog didn’t surprise me. The fact she was legally blind, and lived alone, was indeed a shocker,but she and I hit it off immediately.

I started to stop after my workday was over. After she decided I was not just a do-gooder she asked me do errands for her, and her bank business and I even reconciled her bank statement. Eventually she gave me the trust to pay her bills.

Then it came time to have our pictures taken for the church-wide pictorial guide.I told Florence about it and told her I would take her. She answered she didn’t want to go because she didn’t go to church. I reminded her she was a tither and God would welcome her. Then she was worried about going down the steps. I told her I had never let her down before and wasn’t going to now.

At the appointed time I held her hand as we went down the steps one at a time, until we reached the sidewalk. I bid her stand still until I moved the car for easier access.

She had a glorious time at the church, meeting and greeting old friends and getting her picture taken.

It was my turn to have my picture taken, complete with red jacket. I still have that picture in my bookcase. It was the best picture of me ever taken, not because I had on
my red jacket, but because I had made a fellow Christian happy one night.
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Sharon Henderson
10/08/09
I love this story! I hope is non-fiction! Either way, it is precious.
Jan Ackerson
10/09/09
A great start--very interesting--but you had so many more words, and I wish you had used them. Burned at the stake? When you mention something as shocking as that, it'd be great to tell us more. Why? By whom? And you could strengthen the topic tie-in by mentioning the jacket earlier, maybe by finding it in the back of a closet and reminiscing...I loved this, and I wanted, more, more!
Joshua Janoski
10/11/09
I enjoyed reading this story.

There were some things that I felt needed more explaining. The "burning at the stake" part really threw me for a loop, because I didn't know if he had literally been burned or if this was a figure of speech. Using your full word count would help flesh these things out in more detail.

I appreciate you sharing this story with us, and I look forward to reading more of your stuff in the future.
Genia Gilbert
10/13/09
Like the others, I wanted more, but this is well written.