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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Spring (the season) (07/23/09)

Note to parents: encourage your child to guess the words represented by the pictures. You can check the actual word by holding your mouse pointer over the picture.

Fred the Flower: Fred

Fred's alarm clock started to ring. Fred Blinked and yawned as he rolled slowly out of bed. Suddenly he noticed that there was light coming through his window. It was only six o'clock but the Sun was already peeking over the hills. Without turning off the alarm clock, Fred ran outside. All his friends came happily into the Sun . Fred bowed to Rose who smiled shyly from behind the door of her house. He waved happily towards the rising Sun. He politely greeted Mr. and Mrs. Butterfly as they danced merrily beneath the Rainbow in the warm fresh air. He giggled at the lambs skipping down the hills . Then Fred gazed up at the Rainbow , and thought of clouds sprinkling down rain as the Sun kept shining down on his leaves. Fred and his friends played happily all day long.
Spring had finally arrived.
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Gregory Kane
07/30/09
Hats off for creativity. I certainly had no difficulty visualising the scene! I did feel however that your characters were a bit two-dimensional. Anyway thanks for a wonderfully animated story - I have never quite seen anything like it in FaithWriters.
Allen Stark
07/30/09
Thanks. A breasth of fresh air for the children's story hour.
Joanne Sher 
07/31/09
My daughter LOVED this. SO creative. I'm pretty sure this is a challenge first.
Sara Harricharan
07/31/09
WOW!

I definitely have to give you hats off and credits for such a creative piece! This is definitely a first for FW, I do believe, but I loved this short children's tale. This was lovely! Kudos to you!
Leah Nichols 
07/31/09
Wow....that's so cool! Um, I thought the story kind of short and maybe could use a little more of a connected theme, but I also have no idea how long that took, so yeah....wow....nice work!
Sharon Kane
07/31/09
When our boys were around 2-3 years old I used to read them a 'lift the flap' book, "Spot's walk in the woods". This delightful story takes me right back to those happy days with small children on my lap! This is just gorgeous, and pitched perfectly at very young children.
And the skill that must have gone into creating those pictures... fantastic!!
Carol Slider 
07/31/09
"It was a fun story! Now Fred can go to sleep and wake up and play tomorrow!" --Simon Slider, Age 6
Mona Purvis
08/03/09
I'm jealous. I want to be able to "compose" like that. You did a good job on the children's story and all it needs is a group of children sitting down and someone to show this story. Great teaching tool.
Also, I think it can be said that Spring was so well described with so few words.
A+
Mona
Virgil Youngblood 
08/03/09
Wonderfully done, however it was done.
Tallylah Monroe
08/03/09
Very cute.
Laury Hubrich
08/03/09
Wow! How did you do that? I am very impressed:)
Glynis Becker
08/03/09
Definitely one of the most creative pieces I've seen...great job!
Jackie Wilson
08/04/09
Can't wait to read this with my six year old grandson!
Way cool!
Diana Smith 
08/04/09
Cute and oh so cheerful! Just lovely.
Pamela Kliewer 
08/04/09
At first I thought I was back on the forums, because of seeing the flower... you did a great job with this. VERY creative.
Laura Manley
08/05/09
This is absolutely adorable! If you don't make some kind of a showing for this darling story, something is wrong! Can't wait to see where it places in the Writing Challenge. Laura
Loren T. Lowery
08/05/09
This is as creative as the word labyrinth you created a while back in intermediate. Great job then and now!
Seema Bagai
08/12/09
I think you need to create an entire web site of this kind of story. I'm certain the kinder and first grade teachers I work with will use them with their students. You have a depth of knowledge of technology and creativity that will bless many people.
Kristen Hester
08/13/09
I remembered this story and just looked it up to consul a fussy two-year-old. It worked like a charm. He loves it! Thanks!