The Official Writing Challenge
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Loved it. Terrific imagry. Looks like a winner to me.
I'm not familiar with the structure but then I'm green at this. But the imagery is awesome. Great use of words. Good job!
A great job here! I loved it. Breathtaking and beautifully done.
I liked this. YOu probably realise it, but this is not at all an easy read - the reader has to work quite hard to suck out the marrow. Fine, as long as that is the effect you want!
My favourite line:
'grasps and releases nettled yesterdays.'
You painted a masterpiece with words. Good job.
Good imagery. You started with some great alliteration (sounds). It worked well in the opening, I personally would have enjoyed a continuation; but none-the-less, the beat was wonderful.