The Official Writing Challenge
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Amen! It is so easy to just pass by someone in need. Too easy.
06/10/24
A good example of ‘compassion’. The first and third paragraphs seemed to be missing some punctuation that would have made it flow a little better.
This is an interesting story. I'm sure many people can relate to it in today's world. Speaking of today's world, instant gratification is important especially when a new book or story can be found with a simple click. Instead of starting off with a lesson, you might want to start with a vivid description of the missionary finding the man. That could pull the reader in right away. Trust that your story will deliver your message to the readers without the need to spell it out for them. I liked your characters and the message found in this story. There's something everyone can take away from reading this, which is a great thing.