The Official Writing Challenge
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12/12/20
And I'm so grateful he is!
12/16/20
Good thoughts.
12/30/20
this is a sweet story. My suggestions for taking it from good to great is to replace all passive verbs with active. Don't tell the reader about the day. Put the reader into the day. Let them smell the lunch. Show the jeweler picking up each ring with a sigh of appreciation. Describe his gentle handling of the gems. use dialog with your friends to tie in the theme of our value before God. Show your appreciation of the truth by accepting something about yourself that you had disliked before. I hope that makes sense! Keep scribbling!