The Official Writing Challenge
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10/09/20
No better hero than Jesus!
10/09/20
This story has a powerful message. To make it pop even more, I would suggest showing the reader your thoughts and feelings rather than just telling them. Show yourself sitting in church, soaking in the music, listening to the messages. Show the deep disappointment of your hero's disappearance. Explore the emotion. Show the superiority of choosing Jesus as your hero! Your message is SO on target because many of us have fallen for fallible man at one point or another in our lives. Thank you for this enlightenment!