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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Start (01/16/06)
Bethany

He awoke with a start
His ears ringing
His eyes sealed shut from sleep
His heart beating loudly
His mind heavy, slow, and thick
The edges of a vivid dream
Rabidly disappearing
From mind and memory

So vivid the dream
Gone now

Surrounded by souls
He was
Many dark and turned inward
Some turned out radiating
Internal light
Into the darkness

Shaking
He breathed in
Deeply
A lungful of cold air
Filled with
The fragrances of earth
Moisture
Mold

He stirred now
Filled with an urgency
Of mind
Of emotions
Of will

Still in darkness
He swung from the bed
And stood
The knowledge coming
To him
As his mind cleared
And he stepped
Carefully
Unsteadily
Toward the open door
Before him

It was time
To start

Another phase
Another beginning
Another deep breath
Another new day
Another life
Another name
Another step
Into the
Light of the Son


For whom he loved
And who love him
Was waiting outside
With arms held wide
Calling him softly
One more time.

Lazarus come forth!
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Member Comments
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Date
Leslie Lamb
01/23/06
What a poignant poem from a powerful story. Well done.
Sally Hanan
01/24/06
Clever ... I thought it was about me trying to wake up in the morning :)
Deborah Bauers
01/26/06
Very imaginative. I have one question, though. Did you mean to use the word, "rabidly" to describe the disappearance of the dream, or "rapidly?" The latter would better describe what you are trying to say, I think.
Alexandra Wilkin
01/28/06
A vivid and evocative poetic interpretation; I liked this very much. God bless
Maxx .
01/30/06
How did I miss this one during the week?!? Congrats on your great work and your win!
Julianne Jones
01/30/06
Excellent piece. Congrats on placing.
janet rubin
01/30/06
Beautiful. Even better on the second read- knowing who it's about. Congrats.
Val Clark
01/31/06
Congratulations. Wonderful work, Thomas. Lazarus! Who'd of thought. You kept that information back so skillfully. And yet it can be read on another level, too. Thank you, Yeggy
Deborah Porter 
04/23/06
Hi Thomas.

I'm just preparing all the winning entries for inclusion in the FaithWriters' Anthology for last quarter, and need to get a short bio note from you (written in the third person), to include with our "Meet Our Authors" section. If you are at all unsure what to write, it may be worth checking some of the bio notes at the end of the articles at FaithWriters' Magazine (http://www.faithwritersmagazine.com). Once you have your bio note ready, could you please send it through to me at [email protected]

Thanks for that. Look forward to hearing from you.

With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator and Editor, FaithWriters' Magazine)