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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Home (01/09/06)
Tonia loved going home after work; at least, she used to. So much had changed in America, especially when Comrade Hilton took charge in 2010. America was not the same and homes were not homes anymore—they were dwellings, only used to keep out the elements.

Tonia had an especially difficult day. New guidelines were being enforced at work, and that left little time for individual thinking and recreation. The government had their hand in everything and it seemed like it was just getting worse.

She hoped that she would not be greeted by officers of the “Protect the Home Front.” That always meant a difficult evening. The worst part of all was that no one knew when they would show…

Pleasant Valley was only 10 minutes away from work. She would soon be home. Her children, Jan and Bill, ages 10 and 12 would have supper ready for her. At least, she hoped so, for she was “bone tired.”

As she approached the driveway, her home on 7230 Pleasant Valley looked peaceful but everyone knew these days that looks could be deceiving. She didn’t see any sign of her children but that was nothing to be concerned about. Often they were inside cleaning up the house or making dinner.

Pulling into the garage, something unusual caught her eye…It looked like another car or truck had been in the garage, for there was dirt and grim in the shape of worn tires. The children had access to a second garage door opener and sometimes Jeff, her neighbor would pull in and check on the children for her…Hopefully, that’s all it was….

She got out of the car, lifted her briefcase from the front seat and proceeded to the garage/home side door. What she saw as she opened the door, confirmed her greatest fears---her children had been replaced with robots that looked just like them but she could tell from their eyes that they were not human and she knew that soon she too, would be replaced….It was the year 2010 and everything was replaceable…..

Ah yes, she thought, home sweet home!
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Maxx .
01/21/06
There's a kernel of something here. This actually reads like more of a synopsis of a much much larger work. Just one question ..... where can I buy the robots to replace my children? ;-)
Shari Armstrong 
01/21/06
A very interesting story, but I would have set it a bit further into the future than 4 years to be a bit more "believable" :) As a big scifi fan, I enjoyed it. A bit "scary" but a good read :)
Pat Guy
01/23/06
Scary thought! The apathy of the times! The unquestionable acceptence of being expendable. Sad. Our children feel this way about what the parents fill their lives with - everything but them.